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Phoenix

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You burnt me to ashes
and spat on my grave.
You played mind games
and thought yourself brave.

But I wasn't a dying ember
my soul was long gone.
But I don't remember
because that was then.

I was cold then
in my frozen brain.
I laughed as I burned
and welcomed the pain.

It wasn't the same
as my time with you.
It was a cleansing flame
that healed my scars.

Now I'm reborn.
I'm not a broken puppet.
I'm not a limping rhyme.
I burned, and now I am free.
From ashes to ashes.
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Orion159's avatar
I really liked the message of this! Only real problem I can find is the inconsistent rhyming. The first and third stanzas make good use of it, but then it doesn't show up in any of the other parts. As a result, I got distracted from the subject of the poem while looking for the missing rhymes. I guess what I'm trying to say is, if you're going to use rhymes, either use them throughout or maybe just once at the end. Even if you have a really good one, you'll throw the reader off unless you continue to commit.

Still, good theme! It's one I'm sure many people on this site can relate to, myself included!

I am a dummy!